29 Jun, 2021 03:24 PM

Does this sound ok or do I need to fix it?

I'm writing an essay on happiness and other peoples perspectives on happiness. Im trying to write the intro but im stuck right now on the hook.I have a really hard time putting my thoughts together.So tell me if this is ok or not. Please be honest. Why is it that we crave this emotional illusion to make us feel completely fulfilled by the actions and choices we make in life? Is it imperative that we seek happiness to feel like we have accomplished something or is it to stop the constant negative thoughts that we have so that we could finally be at peace with our minds?

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AL
29 Jun, 2021 03:24 PM

Really good! But maybe one sentence longer?