29 Jun, 2021 03:04 PM

PLEASE PLEASE HELP WITH THIS SENTENCE!?

I really don't know if this is making any sense so far or not. I keep trying to make it sound better, but it doesn't sound right. "1) I believe Jenny's father imparts this to her daughter because he knows poor and rich do not merge the way Jenny deliberates. Her father is well aware that Jenny will not fit in with the rich at the party due to the economic difference that exists between Rose's family and themselves. Update: @Tom Thank you so much, sir! Yes, you're right! Sorry, I didn't notice the "her" part. Thank you for letting me know. :)

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EL
29 Jun, 2021 03:04 PM

Omit "I believe" and just begin with "Jenny's father ".

Instead of poor and rich you could use the wealthy and the unfortunate

The difference in socioeconomic status' present between Rose's family and the (Last name of the other family) will cause Jenny to be seen as an outsider.

JO
29 Jun, 2021 03:04 PM

The sentence seems extremely well written... but in the first sentence did you mean "His daughter" or "Her daughter?"